Genre: Mystical Period Drama (I guess)
“Is he here mother?” the petulant voice demanded.
“He is coming”. A sweet voice replied.
Their prisoner was dragged through the corridor.
“Mother!” the boy shouted in a raspy voice at the prisoner’s entry in the courtroom.
“Shh…” the queen held the trembling boy to her bosom.
“I, the king-to-be, shall bring justice”, the boy shrieked, gaining strength from his mother’s embrace. “Guards! Bring my crayons and this man’s photo. The scars on him should match my hand’s trail on his photo. Laugh at me now, you swine!”
The prisoner looked at the eighteen year old boy holding crayons, hiding behind his podgy mother.
“Lordling, I wouldn’t dare”, he said in a low voice.
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My 114 words for this Friday.
I strayed quite a bit from the photo prompt and exceeded the word limit, but hey, I made it!
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This week’s prompt is given by Rochelle herself. Rochelle, apologies for misusing the prompt. The odds of my writing this week were very low and when I got some spare time to write, I didn’t have the prompt, but a memory of it. It was only after I was done with the story that I remembered there was a very “modern” telephone that would make my period drama fall flat. But falling flat is how we learn to walk. And my memory has made me a worse victim before.
The prompt:
Copyright – Rochelle
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I like it…very well done.
Thanks Boomie. Glad you liked it
Welcome back! A nice take on the prompt.
Thanks
For the welcome too
Hey, you got the crayons! Nice story, Sweet P. It was a bit scary, and this was the scariest line… “He is coming”. A sweet voice replied.
yeah… I got that and I missed the big telephone or the candle stand. Funny how my brain works!
It works as an interesting link of the crayons and the photo. Who says you have to include everything that it’s the prompt? “Off with his head in red, yellow,and orange!”
What he said!
What they both said! A very unique take.
Haha!
Thanks all of you.
Really you have a nice style of writing, and the ‘mystical/magical’ genre in you again is worth pursuing I think. Very well-crafted.
That’s the genre I enjoy reading the most.
So it’s not period fiction that I thought it was?
I think the term can be loosely applied! If its ‘period fiction’ we’ll need to know which period exactly, and to me that’s not important.
To tell you the period I would need to brush up my history. daunting task!
Mythical seems more like it.
thanks!
Totally different take on the prompt. Nice one, enjoyed it.
Thanks Sandra!
Dear Parul,
There. You know my secret.
Thank you for NOT using every object in the story. Yours is a unique story. You were close enough and have nothing to apologize for. I usually try to avoid what I think is the obvious with a prompt.
shalom,
Rochelle
I like your secret. And having read so many of your stories, I can say it works like a charm!
this is completely different —- and it’s the greatest thing about it
Thanks kz!
You wrote after all! Glad you did.
Well done!
Unique angle. Fun read
and no names!
thanks
LOLL!!
True!
crayons caught my eye first as well. I like your different take on the prompt.
great minds think alike
thanks
This is hilarious. I want to see more of the boy-king
Hilarious? The prisoner might disagree
A unique take and a very scary boy-king, thank goodness he had a crayon and not a pair of scissors! Lovely writing.
Thank you!
Parul,
This was well done. Nothing to be sorry about…You nailed it…I have my own thing about the 100 words but I will forgive you for the 14 extra this time. All joking and poking aside like pirate said the “mystical/magical genre in you is worth pursuing”…You do it well.
Tom
Thanks Tom.
I try to stick to 100 too. But I have lost count of how many times I have strayed.
Creative liberty, eh?
What a horrible king! Well done.
Thanks Danny!
good one, nothing inspires pity and loathing like a weak ruler!
Indeed. Thanks
The writing’s great, as usual, Parul, no question there.
But I got confused as to the context. Could you tell me what and where we are and what we’re looking at? Help!!!
I think I had used the wrong writing genre to describe it. Sorry about that. As Yerpirate pointed out, a better categorization of this piece would by mystical.
It is a mythical world where the queen has a wimp of a prince who is as wicked as he is craven. Power and an indulgent mother have only exacerbated the situation.
Here, he is punishing a man who he thinks laughed at him at an earlier time (maybe in a public place). He is too scared to come near the man and hiding behind his mother orders the guards to strike the man according to his instructions.
Hi Parul,
Creative story. Sounds like the young king is endowed with special powers. I think you could extend this story into something more. Ron
Thanks Ron.
Extending on this story could be worth a shot.Making a mental note of it.
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Oh this is scary. If you had wanted a more historical context I guess that “the empress dowager” instead of the queen would have told us who the real ruler is,
“Is he here mother?” the petulant voice demanded. if the voice is “petulant,” it is already demanding. no need to have both. save a word when you can. well done though, regardless of count.