When Fools Reign

Genre: Mystical Period Drama (I guess)

“Is he here mother?” the petulant voice demanded.

“He is coming”. A sweet voice replied.

Their prisoner was dragged through the corridor.

“Mother!” the boy shouted in a raspy voice at the prisoner’s entry in the courtroom.

“Shh…” the queen held the trembling boy to her bosom.

“I, the king-to-be, shall bring justice”, the boy shrieked, gaining strength from his mother’s embrace. “Guards! Bring my crayons and this man’s photo. The scars on him should match my hand’s trail on his photo. Laugh at me now, you swine!”

The prisoner looked at the eighteen year old boy holding crayons, hiding behind his podgy mother.

“Lordling, I wouldn’t dare”, he said in a low voice.

…………………………………

My 114 words for this Friday.

I strayed quite a bit from the photo prompt and exceeded the word limit, but hey, I made it!

For the uninitiated, in case you are wondering what is going on here, read on. Friday Fictioneers is an excellent forum for people looking to have fun as they learn the nuances of writing. Every Friday a bunch of us write 100 words (no hard rules there) for prompts posted by Rochelle who runs the show.

Click here to get to the main post to catch up on the rules and also entries of very able writers!

This week’s prompt is given by Rochelle herself. Rochelle, apologies for misusing the prompt. The odds of my writing this week were very low and when I got some spare time to write, I didn’t have the prompt, but a memory of it. It was only after I was done with the story that I remembered there was a very “modern” telephone that would make my period drama fall flat. But falling flat is how we learn to walk. And my memory has made me a worse victim before.

The prompt:

Copyright – Rochelle

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42 thoughts on “When Fools Reign

      1. I think the term can be loosely applied! If its ‘period fiction’ we’ll need to know which period exactly, and to me that’s not important.

  1. Dear Parul,
    Thank you for NOT using every object in the story. Yours is a unique story. You were close enough and have nothing to apologize for. I usually try to avoid what I think is the obvious with a prompt. 😉 There. You know my secret.
    shalom,
    Rochelle

  2. Parul,
    This was well done. Nothing to be sorry about…You nailed it…I have my own thing about the 100 words but I will forgive you for the 14 extra this time. All joking and poking aside like pirate said the “mystical/magical genre in you is worth pursuing”…You do it well.
    Tom

  3. The writing’s great, as usual, Parul, no question there.

    But I got confused as to the context. Could you tell me what and where we are and what we’re looking at? Help!!! 🙂

    1. I think I had used the wrong writing genre to describe it. Sorry about that. As Yerpirate pointed out, a better categorization of this piece would by mystical.

      It is a mythical world where the queen has a wimp of a prince who is as wicked as he is craven. Power and an indulgent mother have only exacerbated the situation.
      Here, he is punishing a man who he thinks laughed at him at an earlier time (maybe in a public place). He is too scared to come near the man and hiding behind his mother orders the guards to strike the man according to his instructions.

  4. “Is he here mother?” the petulant voice demanded. if the voice is “petulant,” it is already demanding. no need to have both. save a word when you can. well done though, regardless of count.

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