The Reluctant Collaborator (Voice 2 of 5)

If she was just gawky, it was fine… if she was just shy, it was fine too…   but she is gawky and shy and also rude to top it all! She comes to me – not a smile, not a hello… thrusts these papers in my hand … “Give these to your Mom”

All this weird stuff written on them… incarceration, kings and dragons… Pretty impressive writing, but she could’ve added a “Please”.

Calls herself a writer… well she’ll never be successful like Mom with that frown on her face! I don’t know why Mom entertains that loon ball!

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99 words

This is my second entry for Voice Week 2014.

Voice week is a writing challenge hosted by Stephanie of BekindRewrite to experiment with different voices.

There will be 5 installments coming, one each day, from Sep 22nd to Sep 27th.

Previous Voice:

Voice 1

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26 thoughts on “The Reluctant Collaborator (Voice 2 of 5)

  1. Ah, nice. This one’s a lot younger, and maybe hasn’t developed much understanding of different kinds of people yet, assuming rudeness when I suspect the girl in question is actually just super shy and doesn’t know how to talk to people.

  2. It’s interesting to see that the commenters are split between deciding that the girl being described is either simply shy or is proud and arrogant. I’m inclined to go with the former — this voice seems young and perhaps naïve, and so may not be a reliable narrator.

    Very intriguing. Awesome stuff. 🙂

    1. I wanted to bring in some jealousy, but I thought the number of words I was targeting were not enough for it. Good to know you could catch a slight hint of it.

  3. Is this the daughter? She’s got the expressive and judgemental passion of a teenager – interesting how many teenagers we’ve had on VW already! I like how she clearly secretly respects her Mum.

    1. Sorry if this was confusing… I introduced two new characters in this one. A young boy about the same age as the girl, and his mother who happens to be a famous author. And the girl was handing some of her writings to the boy to pass them to his mother. The boy is proud of his mother but doesn’t like the unfriendliness of the girl…

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